The poem was really hard to follow up.
I had to read it over and over again to the point. But once you do get it is amazing.

You've become too close to my heart
Our fears of hope are dying
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i love how you phrased that...like i said i had to read it a couple times. But oh my goodness it is beautiful.

The corpse of love has started
Although we keep on trying
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I really liked how this flowed. Each line compliments each other.

Together for all always, forever we'll be
But what isnt new dies fast
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these were some more lines that i had to keep on reading but it made it worth reading.

When we get old we finally see
forgotten tears of relationships past
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this to me symbolises....something that seems fun at first but then gets old.
I think that is what you were going for...but i am not sure.

The "love period" is when you start anew
After, our dark hearts start weeping
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i dont know what you mean by dark hearts.
sorry

The crimson tears of Rose's in bloom
Stops us both from sleeping
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When you read this out loud this part has so much flow.

So now we are in darkness
not knowing where our hearts lie
Time has entombed our hearts
Waiting for us to die
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Beautiful ending. I love it

Great job on this piece
*BurningSoul*

Your rhyme scheme seems a wee bit forced, and personally... look, being creative is good and all, but the death doom and destruction really doesnt fly in good poetry. It's not expressing yourself - its trying to 'sound' expressive. You can get the same point accross without sounding like a masochist who spends most of their days in a dark corner claiming the world hates them. Really.
I know this all sounds pretty harsh and presumptuous, but if I had to judge you by this poem that would be my impression.

I liked the last stanza if you could rrc any of 4 latest poems that would be nice 4/5

Together for all always,

Hmm...
Do you mean...
Together and always?
Always's part meaning is all.

But what isn[']t new dies fast[er?]

Alright.
I usually imagine things in my mind when I read a poem.

For this one, specifically,
It thought of a person up in stage,
Mumbling, scared to death, looking at her/his shoes.

It's probably because most of what you wrote
Were ramblings to me.
They didn't really connect with one another, or at least not that well.

Reasonably good... A few quirks here and there. I'd have given it a 4.5, but that wasn't an option so I went with 5.

Stanza 1: Strong start, good rhythm and meter.
"The corpse of love has started
Although we keep on trying"
Not sure what exactly you mean here. Corpses don't start. Change it?

Stanza 2: "Together for all always, forever we'll be"
Not all always. It sounds awkward. It'd be tricky to change, since "All eternity" just won't work. I'd switch the sense of the phrase around.
"When we get old we finally see"
Not get. People don't get old in poetry. They grow, they become, they watch the person in the mirror change.

Stanza 3:
"The "love period" is when you start anew
After, our dark hearts start weeping"
Absolute genius. Been reading Robert Herrick's "To The Virgins?"

Last stanza: You've used "hearts" twice, dear. And in the same stanza, no less. I'd put
"So now we are in darkness
not knowing where WE lie
Time has entombed our hearts"
This way, it'd solve a meter problem in line 2 and line 3 wouldn't sound too repetitive.

So far so good I like the format lines are flowing well with the rhyming perfect

I like your word choice and metaphors

Wow..
great poem of yours..
It was deep and really complicated to understand at 1st..
but if you'll try to understand it well,
you'll get it and love it..
well, 5/5