Comments : Nothing Left to Say

  • 15 years ago

    by Curing the Comon Cliche

    This is amazing, its very good at getting the emotions in the words across to the reader. just, purely poetic in a sense.

  • 15 years ago

    by Shellaine shelli

    Wow, well done on a great write. your use of words was amazing and shows rather than tells of all the hurt and pain. whilst reading this I cant even begin to tell you how many images rushed through my head so well done and keep up the good work darling!

  • 15 years ago

    by Heba

    Wow, it was a fantastic and wonderful poem and i reaaly like it.

  • 15 years ago

    by Jayke

    I'll agree this poem is amazing, I believe it will one day it will change how someone thinks, someone thats in the similar position, well done 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Britt

    Wow completely breathtaking. verry cleverr, and so sad. you'ree an awesome writer. and i am speechless. lol greatt job! im so saving this to my favorites! lol

  • 15 years ago

    by Asher

    Your talented!
    i felt what you wrote the message if that even makes any sence!
    ((5))

  • 15 years ago

    by Caitlinn

    This brought tears to my eyes. You're really talented. Great job!

  • 15 years ago

    by Hannah Mhairi

    Breath-taking yet very sad, it's on ma faves now all the stars in tha sky 4 it!!!

  • 15 years ago

    by BrOkEn HeArT

    Way to go girl!!! i loved this poem! it was great! it was so well writin! keep it up.

  • 15 years ago

    by Krathia

    Great poem, I especially liked the last two stanzas. I think the first stanza was your weakest, since the misdirection there might have a negative effect on your readers. Nobody wants to read yet another poem about a ditched friend.

    "You've put me in a reckless bind"
    Don't strain the rhyme. Ignore the rhyme scheme if you must, but don't make it sound forced.

    "You could've been a someone, you could have had a life"
    I like "a someone". It's so much more desperate, it sounds as if you're pleading, but you're too late to stop what had occured. WHich is true here.

    "And on that knife
    Lies your blood so red and divine
    Oh why did you have to ruin your life?
    Why did you have to ruin mine?"
    Second line: a very specific, vivid detail. This is the strongest stanza in the poem, because everything reaches a peak but doesn't spill over. The repitition (3rd and 4th line) makes the peak that much unattainable. Wonderfully done.

    "The blood on your coffin is only stained"
    Another forced rhyming, this one less obvious than the other one. Still, I suggest you either ignore the rhyme scheme or, well, make better use of the rhymer.

    "And there's nothing left to say "
    Strong strong ending.

  • 15 years ago

    by Raychil

    I loved this poem. Its so tragic...so emotional. So many people know someone like this. I loved every word, the flow was fantastic and I love how much of yourself you put in this.
    <3Raych

  • 15 years ago

    by ItsYou ItsAlwaysBeenYou

    Wow this was truly amazing. there was so much emotion and feeling in this poem! another great job :)

  • 15 years ago

    by Angel

    Wow diz iz deep n u waz ake it simple 2 understand u just let it all out n datz good love da poem ma fav

  • 15 years ago

    by Sora

    This was a wonderful piece of work!! yer a great writer, never quit writing! =]

  • 15 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Ohh.. this is really a dark poem... pain remorse sadness... it could be felt in ever stanza...

    "My tears are only drained
    Our lives are only washed away
    The blood on your coffin is only stained
    And there's nothing left to say "

    ^^ good ending...

    "And there's nothing left to say" -- this really touched me...

    keep writing..

  • 15 years ago

    by Bugg

    Wow! How sad. That really touched me and made me cry! I loved the ending. It was really good. It feels so raw, like you really put your heart into this poem. I thouht it was amazing.

  • 15 years ago

    by Bugg

    Wow! How sad. That really touched me and made me cry! I loved the ending. It was really good. It feels so raw, like you really put your heart into this poem. I thouht it was amazing.

  • 15 years ago

    by S R P

    I really enjoyed this poem. A lot of emotions behind the words, it really touched me.

  • 15 years ago

    by Chelsea King

    It was another amazing poem that you put your heart and soul in!! 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by ForeverASickKid

    This is a amazing poem! it has so much feeling in it!