Beautiful poem..

i love it.. and the repeatition really makes the poem spark.

i enjoyed reading this piece of writing.

5/5 from me :)

This is beautiful The metaphors are woven into wonderful imagery with room for a little contemporary slang

well done.... very romantic

Wonder poem, sounds like it would make an excellent song too.

This fellow should rip that dagger from his heart and use it to shatter the window... lol
that would be like killing two birds wth one stone.

great poem

Awwww:)
this is sooo sweet!!
i rlly like it:]
its sooo full of feelings n different from anything else ive read:]
rlly cute=]

A beautiful poem, quite like a song, Actually i do belive it is a song. Maybe i'm wrong, maybe not. The imagery you've created in this poem/song is vivid, and i liked the repitition of the 4-line stanza.
My favourite lines:

This World has been cruel to me
But all I can do is walk it's lands
Between sunset and sunrise until
The light offers comfort again

^^The image this created in my mind is one where you are wandering around, lost, with no sense of direction, until sunrise, the light comforts you, as a reunion with your loved one would. Maybe thats what i was meant to pick up from it, maybe not =]

5/5 Well done, don't stop writing.

MEZi x

The embers of hope remain
Though an existence rests on my shoulders
And an everlasting love in the palm of my hands
This is worse than any darkness
Even heavens above are dead to me

*This was my favorite part. I love love love the imagery you use here. I love the diction you use as well. I felt such a happy feeling when I read this, you really arent afraid to put your heart out there for us all to see. That's why you're such a talented writing. You don't hold anything back. Keep it up. Nik*

The one thing that makes you different, is the one thing that keeps you for the one you want. At that point you're wishing that you were the same as everybody else.
I liked how you used darkness as a metaphor for a glass wall. You can see your lover but you can't touch her. This may sound weird but you poem reminded me of the movie Bouble Boy.

I loved the line "If all for one embrace I would give the world."

Great job thanks for the read