Comments : Between Sunset and Sunrise

  • 15 years ago

    by Michelle18

    Beautiful poem..

    i love it.. and the repeatition really makes the poem spark.

    i enjoyed reading this piece of writing.

    5/5 from me :)

  • 14 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This is beautiful The metaphors are woven into wonderful imagery with room for a little contemporary slang

    well done.... very romantic

  • 14 years ago

    by East Poetry

    Wonder poem, sounds like it would make an excellent song too.

    This fellow should rip that dagger from his heart and use it to shatter the window... lol
    that would be like killing two birds wth one stone.

    great poem

  • 14 years ago

    by Jacqueline Bautista

    Awwww:)
    this is sooo sweet!!
    i rlly like it:]
    its sooo full of feelings n different from anything else ive read:]
    rlly cute=]

  • 14 years ago

    by Mezmeryz

    A beautiful poem, quite like a song, Actually i do belive it is a song. Maybe i'm wrong, maybe not. The imagery you've created in this poem/song is vivid, and i liked the repitition of the 4-line stanza.
    My favourite lines:

    This World has been cruel to me
    But all I can do is walk it's lands
    Between sunset and sunrise until
    The light offers comfort again

    ^^The image this created in my mind is one where you are wandering around, lost, with no sense of direction, until sunrise, the light comforts you, as a reunion with your loved one would. Maybe thats what i was meant to pick up from it, maybe not =]

    5/5 Well done, don't stop writing.

    MEZi x

  • 14 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    The embers of hope remain
    Though an existence rests on my shoulders
    And an everlasting love in the palm of my hands
    This is worse than any darkness
    Even heavens above are dead to me

    *This was my favorite part. I love love love the imagery you use here. I love the diction you use as well. I felt such a happy feeling when I read this, you really arent afraid to put your heart out there for us all to see. That's why you're such a talented writing. You don't hold anything back. Keep it up. Nik*

  • 14 years ago

    by Spirit

    The one thing that makes you different, is the one thing that keeps you for the one you want. At that point you're wishing that you were the same as everybody else.
    I liked how you used darkness as a metaphor for a glass wall. You can see your lover but you can't touch her. This may sound weird but you poem reminded me of the movie Bouble Boy.

    I loved the line "If all for one embrace I would give the world."

    Great job thanks for the read