Comments : Without A Trace...

  • 15 years ago

    by The Lonely Rose

    Ummmm firstly, you should make a line of these thingy**** to seperate the poem and the A/N( authors notes...

    it seemed more of a story...a very sad story of coarse...The lines were pretty good but it just came together more of a story...

  • 15 years ago

    by MariaJose94

    Thanks for telling me to check it out! it is really good! i loved itt! congrats!

  • 15 years ago

    by Sora

    Wow an amazing poem has to rhym just to let you kno, bcuz it's coming from yer very heart and soul =]

    I suddenly appeared into a bleak, terrifying nightmare
    I stumbled across a shattered mirror; I slowly looked into it and didn't even recognize my own reflection
    When I closed my eyes, then open them once more rain started to pour down on me
    Suddenly I began travel through a dark never-ending alley that appeared before my eyes
    I continually cried out for help, but yet all I could hear my echo
    I started to go through self-destruction, and felt so that my negative thoughts defeated over my hope

    that's my favorite stanza!! and it is a wonderful poem/story. i lovedd it, and you should be proud of what you've written, it's beautiful!!

  • 15 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    This was more of a story, than a poem. It was very descriptive and used a ton of imagery.. but I think that you should make it into more of a stanza-like format.. which would make it more like a poem.. Shorten up your lines.. and tada you have a poem. :] It's more of a story.. but if you want to keep it as a story.. just state it's a story.. because otherwise people will think it's a story and it shouldn't be posted here. =) Great work, 5/5