Soul collaspes

"A lonely soul sits in the dark,"

-I immediatly like the mood you set for this poem.

"All alone in a place so familiar yet now so unknown,"

-This to me is a phrase that could be a quote, I like how you say alone again. It adds emphasis to how she's feeling.

"Waits for a rocket to come take her home,"

-I didn't really understand why you chose a rocket, but then I was like wait I like it, it's something most people wouldn't think of.

"Tears fall down her face,
Dreams don't come true,
Not now not tonight not ever,"

-These lines hit home for me, seeing as how this is once how I felt in my life. The way you get into the girl's head is good.

"Soul collapses devil takes over,
For noone is here for her,
Even though they said they'll be,"

-I like the symbolism is here, and how you keep going into the girl's emotions.

"She's alone in the dark,"

-Effective move on tying this line up with your first line.

"Seems to be losing everyone to the darkness,
Tension building wherever she goes,
Now she doesn't just want this rocket to come,
But needs it for she can't resist devils evil fate. "

-Wow, I mean pure wow. The way you end this poem is amazing, and the rocket I like, only because it's different.

5/5

5/5. great poem...didnt realise i'm not there for u...sorry.