Wow this is a great piece of poem........
It goes smoothly & well.........
i give it 5/5
good work

WOW! A very unique piece so well written. I liked your style, it's very different but it works well for what you wish to convey.

I can feel your pain through every word that is flawless in describing the innermost painful feelings and the loneliness u feel is well captured here in.

Excellent! 10/5

Wow this a really beautiful poem. so deep and quite pure. it's very powerful to me. it held so much meaning, it touched me. you have a unique writing style, and i love it. job well done. 5/5.

-Ashlei.

This poem is very good i loved it
i really felt the sadness in this poem
you are a really good poet
keep it up

Andy I really liked the unique writing style of this piece. It really worked well in this piece.

Everything has lost its color
-the ground below me
-the sky low above
-the rigid figures around me
-the flower i hold against my heart
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Great description of sadness and how everything seems to lose it's color.

I've been trying so hard
to convince myself you're gone
That i'm left on my own
Alone to walk on
Would have been there, if i had known...
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Such a sad and touching ending. The things we would of done and perhaps said ... if we had known.

The depth of this poem reaches even beyond the words. It reaches into the readers soul and makes one really think.

Great read Andy !!!!!