This was so touching... It really is capable of touching d readers soul depths....

Too good a thought n too gr8 a poem..

keep it up....

Best wishes for ur future writes too...

Karan

Wow. This is a great piece. I loved everything about it. The choice of words, the rhymes, and the beautiful images your words provided -- everything.

"Dreams entrapped in forlorn eyes
Image shimmering in distant skies
Grim Reaper played its fatal trick
Living life like a burned out wick."

I loved the last two lines in this stanza. They were my personal favourite.

This piece is amazingly written. Great job.

5/5

``Briana

Oh, wow! I loved the second stanza. It was very beautiful, as was the entire poem. I liked the vocabulary used, and the emotion was definitely there. There's really nothing more to say. It was really great!

That was good!
i love the compareson!
lol
<3 lex

I liked this one. My thought of the poem of what it was saying was that you just want to find the memory of this one person that has left you and your trying so hard to get them back.

keep it up.
keep on writing.
love always and forever.

First stanza last line I would add "to".
Last stanza the rhymes are weak. No thoughts on the first but the last...... "Our heartstrings forever will entwine."

as always an opinion

Very simple format but it conveys so much. Amazing word choice, especially the two lines with the comparison "somber petals" and "rusting metals". Love it. The rest of the poem is great too. A great write. 5/5

RL
Another poem of sadness that has touched my heart.

Smile wilted into somber petals
Life stagnant like rusting metals
Love snatched by a devastating gale
An era of loneliness now prevail.

How painful it is when love is snatched away from us.

Dreams entrapped in forlorn eyes
Image shimmering in distant skies
Grim Reaper played its fatal trick
Living life like a burned out wick.

When the one you love dies. So do we. Walking through life like we are sleeping. Going through the days without purpose.

You never left any footsteps behind
Still I search in the sands of time
Though your hand slipped out of mine
Our heartstrings will remain entwined.

Even though this person is gone we pretend they are still beside us. The connection of love lives forever.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

I woke up and the first thing i do is read this poem, absolutely amazing work here. Great word choice and flow, nice imagery too.

Wow, you're incredible. please keep up the good work!

5/5

HvN

'Life stagnant like rusting metals'
To be honest I like this line. It's creative. And very poetic too. I have no problem with that. Other lines are also very good. Wonderful write.

You are so creative it amazes me!

please keep writing i really like your wide imagintion if you know hwat i mean.?

This poem is amazing.
The choosing of words is breathtaking, and the rhymes are just perfect.
This poem is a little peice expressing a lot. Although we're far, and not together, we'll still be connected by heart.

Excellent write 5/5