Very... Unique. Different but good. the words were wonderful. keep writing

Well is there more? it was really good but what about the ending?

Nice poem, Deven, keep it up. Greta x

This is kinda special..write more..

Thats a diff one for me! it was enjoyable 2 read though. the ending was good.

~tia :]

Im going to be brutally honest. Its confusing and if your going to give that effect, get rid of the ...'s and make some lines.