No longer hope

by Kaila   Jul 19, 2008


Body's numbing, lungs slowly fill with tears.
You've drowned out my screams, all left with fears.
Nobody is watching, as I plea to see her again.
You laugh in my face, blood trickles down then.

I taste it sweet but bitter, mixed with salt and hate.
You twist and dangle me around, calling me your bait.
You're hoping that she'll take it; you'll leave me cold.
I'm hoping that she'll run, knowing the bets not sold.

I fling and twist and scream, spit comes off your laughter.
As I bite my lip trembling, wondering if I'll see her after.
Kicking at my shins you get your desired plead.
Choking back your smile, a smirk is all you need.

I lye upon this wall cuffs bruising up my battered wrists.
Tearing away the skin I shimmy and then I twist.
Only ripping apart my bruised arms and exterior.
You spit upon my face reminding me who's superior.

You plant your tongue upon my cheek licking to my hair.
I shutter, feeling your acid on my skin leaves me bare.
Hopeless I close my eyes thinking about her lovely face.
I hope that she can find her way and escape this awful place.

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  • 14 years ago

    by Hollow Emotion

    Another nice poem... i just feel that when yiou say "I fling and twist and scream, spit comes off your laughter." your using too many "ands" in that sentance, if you put it as "I fling, twist, and scream, spit comes off your laughter." The flow in that stanza would run a lot smoother, but thats just my opinion.

    Other than that, this is another nicely written poem. Awesome job!

  • 15 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    "I taste it sweet but bitter, mixed with salt and hate."
    `Maybe.. "It tastes sweet but bitter, mixed with salt and hate."
    OR...
    `I taste it. It is sweet but bitter, mixed with salt and hate."
    OR...
    `I taste it, and it is sweet but bitter, mixed with salt and hate."
    -I think there was something missing, maybe a word or two.. there are three suggestions, if you want to use any of them in re-wording that line, go ahead. :]

    "I lye upon this wall cuffs bruising up my battered wrists."
    `I'm pretty sure you meant lie instead of lye.

    Woww. This poem was full of imagery and was extremely dark. Well written with great description and word-choice :] 5/5. Great work, keep it up!

  • 15 years ago

    by benjamin

    Wow.. thats a powerful poem.. im supprized you havent gotten any comments.. thats really weird to me.. that was a great poem .. despite the fact that from my POV this was probably extremely hard to write.. this is a wonderful poem.. and you put visuals in so we can feel "her" pain very very powerful i think this is one of the best poems i have ever read

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