It was well written and very creative & thoughtful.
--Also, the best poems come from the heart and mind.
So it's a good poem! Even if it's not your best.
Continue writing. You are talented.
(read some of my poems, please. the new ones. i want your opinion on them).
It was a wonderful poem and so touching. I don't know why all of you didn't like it, I think if you are honest in expressing what you feel while you are writing a poem, that makes you great enough.
Very nice poem.
You can see it in my eyes
How much I care about you
^^I dunno but I think this would look even better if there was a punctuation mark in it perhaps comma or something. They say eyes are the window of your soul, which mean how much you truly care for that person.
You can hear it from my heart
How much I would cherish and love you
^^Punctuation mark again would be necessary here. Its amazing how someone can hear your heartbeat exactly the same as how you want them to feel from you. I guess its possible only when you two are truly have the same genuine feelings toward each others.
You can feel it from my soul
My pleasure when I'm around you
^^Punctuation mark again would make this look even better. Although I think the word PLEASURE and soul didnâ€™t fit much. I think it should be a something holy or saintly or deeper than pleasure coz it sounded like satisfaction or enjoyment. First stanza was eyes & care, second stanza was heart & cherish and love you which ways both ok unlike this third stanza.
As words would never match your beauty
Tons of poems would fail to describe you
^^It shown here a very strong adoration and admiration to that someone.
so what you only need to know
is that i really do love you
^^These two lines should be capitalized just like the rest of the stanzas. The word so I dun think was necessary. Actually you ended your poem in a subtle yet lovely way.
If you go and read one of my poems called Love Isnt Imaginary, This poem is somehow a perfect match for it, for we both have described love in the same way.
I have a girlfriend who first language is German and and just learnng english is difficult. Whle your poems have the occasional phrase that doesn't quite work generally they are very good. I think you should be very proud and with persistance you will create some beautiful works. For what is importance is the heart and feelings behind the words. And that is why you will get so much out of poetry. I always say poetry is a window to your soul and you will learn so much about yourself and other will too.