Woah, shivers down my spine.
very good. and goodluck in the contest, it deserves to place.

I have nothing to say about this poem.. but wow.
I really enjoy your writing style.

My favourite line was:
I've murdered almost half the town
Only hoping you are near.

Very well written. :)

This was a wonderful write.. the rhyme was consistant & the poem flowed along smoothly. Interesting format as well. Good write, 5/5. :]

I hope you do well in the contest :)
I don't really have anything bad to say about this poem. It was very good. Everything flowed perfectly and it was interesting in it's own way.

WOW that was somewhat yet a creepy and very oringinal poem .I liked it especially the end.

Wow that was great. It was simple but i loved it anyways. Nice job, and iu love the title to, very original. Shanik

This is a good write... Portrays a different kind of story.... Good work! 8)

5/5.

O...m...g... austin!!! this is so great!! i absolutely love it. definately going into my favs.

This poem has it's one unique style that well captivates the emotion prevalent within in it. I find it interesting how you portrayed the emotions by using different similes throughout. Overall I enjoyed it. Nice work.

I hope you win the contest its a great poem! 5/5

Nice poetry. The rhyming was perfect, and didn't seem at all forced. I completely agree that this is a love poem, it's heartfelt and well structured. Really great write, I gave you a 5/5 (A rare occasion on my part..)

Sole x

Wow. I didn't know what to expect from the title but that was pretty neato! ;D

Good luck in the contest this poem is very good!
Great job =]

Beautiful. The flow here was just flawless and nothing seemed forced or out of place. The loving mood you created with your wonderful choice of words was great and kept me interested from beginning to end. Loved it.

"Love you are my shining crown"
^I feel like there should be a comma after love.

Well done.
*5/5*

This is not the run of the mill love poem in fact I find it very unique
well done

Wow that was so awesome!!

I've murdered almost half the town
Only hoping you are near.-my favorite part.

can you imagine if that was true!!..lol
5/5

I like the gore and love ideas put together .. The rime scheme is different , but i like it . Keep it upp

Hmm, you write cryptically.

I really liked this poem. It painted a pretty picture in my head, but it wasn't because you gave a play by play description of everything, but because of the way you wrote it all. The way you phrase things lets me paint a picture in my head and then you direct the picture without changing mine.

I hope you haven't really murdered half a town. But the ending was very cute and very fitting. I love how you didn't go on about the end there, I love you closed it all so nicely, leaving room for the reader to want more, but ending it enough so that the reader isn't sitting on the edge of his/her seat waiting of a non-existent sequel.

excellent job

-mo-

This poem is really dark, but it also writes about love so i liked the contrast.

i thought that how you told a story all blended in so well.

well written poem.

Very interesting poem..
i like the flow to it. and again your rhyme is amazing.

"I've murdered almost half the town
Only hoping you are near."
this is my favorite part because it shows that for love you'll do anything and destroy anyone that gets in your way to finding true LOVE...

**Ada**
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