Comments : Beautiful Morn

  • 13 years ago

    by Cindy

    RL
    Your talent is shining in this one :)

    Floating billows
    Orange hue,
    Swaying groves
    Sprinkling dew,

    I feel like I'm laying in the green grass looking up at this beautiful sky with the clouds floating by.

    Yawing sunshine
    Crowns horizon,
    Bees humming
    Delicate blossoms,

    I can see the flowers opening to greet the buzzing bees :)

    Smiling butterflies
    fluttering by,
    Chirping birds
    Soaring high,

    I love this stanza but again I love butterflys :)

    Azure crystals
    Shimmering display,
    Beautiful morn
    Promising day.

    This just makes you want to jump up and greet the morning.
    ~clapping~
    Love Cindy

  • 13 years ago

    by Goodbye

    This is cheering me up. Very well done. Great flow. I am sure it is a beautiful morn if you see through this poetess! Nature is inspiring and so are your poems. You are my summer breeze.... Sending you white clouds from city of Helsinki. :P

  • 13 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    This is absolutely beautiful, a really breathtaking poem here. Great descriptions and word choice and you blew me away. What vivid imagery you have painted in my mind, so nice work! Keep writing, always and forever....

  • 13 years ago

    by debbylyn

    Wonderfully descriptive.....love the simplicity and word choices!

  • 13 years ago

    by Shinobi

    A very nice piece indeed. The broken lines passed out the breathtaking sight of the moon, and the shine of dawn. The rhymes were good, and the choosing of words was excellent.

    Nothing bad to say, 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by gracey grey

    Very well structured poem. Words not exceeding beyond 5 syllables. You seem to have successfully captured the simple pleasures of nature amazingly.

  • 13 years ago

    by Ed or Ian Henderson

    I love clean crisp poems like this. This was like a glass of cider over ice on a hot day: very welcome!

  • 13 years ago

    by Prasad Baadkar

    Wow.. wat a poem...

  • 13 years ago

    by Moose

    The imagery in this poem is astounding. You used a great variation of words to where it sounded no where near repetitive,

    Azure crystals
    Shimmering display,
    Beautiful morn
    Promising day.

    ^^^ Is probably my favorite stanza of the four. Although it is the summerizing stanza so it should be a bit above par. The rhyme and rhythm throughout the whole poem is very well tended to, and I didnt have to work at all to slow down or speed up. The poem carried me through it the whole way.

    There is one thing I disliked. In the very first stanza

    Yawing sunshine
    Crowns horizon,
    Bees humming
    Delicate blossoms,

    you have an ABCB rhyme going the last 3 stanzas but for some reason it avoided you in the first one. I havent a clue if it is just me, but the first stanza kinda chopped it up after reading the last 3. Horizon and Blossoms really dont go hand in hand in rhyming. I think if you could just alter this little problem the poem would be perfect.

  • 13 years ago

    by Christopher Wry

    Love the picture well done.

  • 13 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Excellent word choice and picture painting imagery in this piece. The rhyming is not forced and it flows well. Excellent job and very deserving of the win. Congratulations!

  • 13 years ago

    by gracey grey

    Most deserving win. Congrats.

  • 13 years ago

    by Polly

    A beautiful poem that really put me in the scene and made me imagine everything there.. Lovely choice of words that makes the poem simple but very effective.

  • 13 years ago

    by Polly

    (Apologies if I have commented twice, I just hit submit and then couldnt find my comment)

    I like this poem, it make me really imagine the scene and put me right there in the poem. Love choice of words which makes it simple but very effective!
    Pollu

  • 13 years ago

    by Polly

    Whoops, so I just found my first comment, so sorry!

  • 13 years ago

    by Gentle Storm

    Superb imagery...superb poem. Kudos!

  • 12 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    I can see how this won the weekly contest.
    A yawning sunrise is a great discription. I love the short verse, compact with meaning and images concise.

    Well done..adserved win.

    Michael

  • 12 years ago

    by just ashley

    I love the rhymes. it flowed really well. once again i can visualize this poem. i love it

  • 12 years ago

    by ben thompson

    Beautiful write, great description, i feel like i'm outside on a gorgeous spring day. when really i'm buried in side under a mountain of snow. lol. 5/5. all the best wishes ben thompson