Very nice ryme, good imagery here, i can picture everything.

in the 4th stanza, third line you have: I starts to run, the heart begins to race,

i think you meant " I start" or " It starts"?

i'm not sure, but proof read this again and make sure to fix any mistakes that are there :]

5/5

keep up the good work

I really like this, it's an interesting view to take (from the antagonist's side). 5/5 very nice flow with the rhyme :)

"He wakes up in the morning wondering why,
Sitting up, he wishes he could just stay down,
Just another day wishing life would let him die,
Waining, faltering in the guilt that makes him drown.."

Excellent word choice and this really drew me into your poem.

"Your Heartless Horseman travels to the abyss,
Dashing, running, hunting in a sea of hearts,
In my haste Is there something that I miss,
Has my heart dried up and become parts?"

Wonderful imagery here, I could see it in my head! :)

"The wind of winter tosses me upon my back,
I let myself stop breathing but I open my eyes;
The sight is but a statue holding my heart attack,
So near the end I see the angel was a bold disguise"

This part is brilliant, great flow and story-line. Good job, this was a pleasure to read from the beginning to the end. Keep writing, always and forever....

Nice poem I give it 5 n you could do any poem don't matter

This poem was really interesting. I love how it was written in almost a storylike form. The flow and rhythm of this poem was so oustanding. Very easy to read. Word choice was really good in some parts, where in others it wasn't as strong. Great write overall. Deserves a 5/5.

"I am the Heartless Horseman,
Please guide me to her grave,
I feel not fear nor pain, but I want it to begin,
So I must find my heart to become brave"
begin doesn't rhyme with horseman. I sort of stumbled there. My only other issue was that you tended to say heart a lot. Edit out some typos. I like the words. They paint a beautiful, scary, and gory picture. I had a few issues with the rhymes, but it wasn't bad after rereading this a couple of times. It tells a story without deviating. The straight hard truth. It's amazing. I think you need to work on rhyming but that is all.
Great piece!

Lexie

I really like the title first of all because it's definately an attention grabber. I see a lot of poems on this site with excellent titles and then when I go to read them the poem itself is horrible haha Not in this case though you complimented the title very well and I enjoyed the read. "The colors fade and I clutch to life like a hungry leech" I really loved that line I thought it was very strong and poetic. Excellent work 5/5 GG23

Rather good, though you used "heart" an AWFUL lot!
the imagery was good, though i didn't understand most of it XD, it brought the mood to a melancholic state, which i found to be very appealing right now

Ummmm Alex Was Right That Strangely Touched Me....But It Is Possiably The Best Poem I've Read In The Past 6 Months I Mainly Like:

He wakes up in the morning wondering why,
Sitting up, he wishes he could just stay down,
Just another day wishing life would let him die,
Waining, faltering in the guilt that makes him drown..

All Right Well I've Got To Say You've Got A Pretty Sick Twisted Talent...But We ALl Do In Our Own Lil Way....L@T3R

So sad... are you sure you're 15? this sounds to me like a man who has been tossed around by life. this is such an amazing piece. like i said the emotin is just...sad. great job.

So many of the things I was thinking. I am amazed that this piece is so in depth. It is very creative and emotional and the story of it is stunning. Anyway I'll keep this comment shortish, excellent job on this piece.