-Speechless?- I really don't know how to comment this :/ notthatitsnotgood...

Wow, that was...dark.

I really loved all the descriptive words you used and the way you said it all. It sounded to me like a little kid who is scared but won't admit it. Just that same sense and feeling, I don't mean I imagined a little kid or anything.

Overall, this was an awesome poem! Good Job!

-mo-

I really loved this poem. For many reasons actually. First off, I absolutly loved the word choice in it because it you made it unique and original at the same time. It takes a special talent to pull something like that off. Second, I loved how in some parts I couldn't quite figure out specific parts. It makes the reader think a little.

Crash, like a socket let go.
The bulb kissed the ground for the very first time,
an aftermath so magical that it made the lights flee
through every open window.

^^Amazing opening. The best actually. It automatically draws the reader into your poetry which is a very good thing:)

There is nothing for me to criticize on. I really liked it. Keep writing! 5/5

Mm... beautiful style. I read your post on the message boards about how it would be impossible to tell whether you were a man or a woman from your poetry. I'm glad you posted it, because it's true. Those things that we get taught about what is girl and what is boy don't matter.

Anyways, I really enjoyed this poem. Everything about it was wonderful.