Comments : Too Far Gone

  • 15 years ago

    by Cindy

    Nitin
    Another excellent piece you have penned. I love your choice of words and the imagery it brings to the mind.

    There's a candle burning in the name of love
    At this point where the dead end starts
    Life is just one big circle of emotions
    In the end only things bleeding are our hearts

    It seems funny that the ones we love the most are the ones that leave us with our hearts bleeding.

    Years of trust won't guarantee true love
    Unconditional sacrifices could go invain
    Time just an enjoyable game played by God
    With two hands that love to embrace pain

    It seems that it is always one that gives unconditionaly and the other always wants more. This leaves both embracing the pain.

    Commitment a suicide note from innocent souls
    Excuse to satisfy cause of life imprisonment
    Compromising circumstances rule our destiny
    Pushing fading fate further to its descent

    How does life come to this. Feelings of punishment where happiness should be. This is a very heart breaking piece. It brings tears to my eyes.

    Just kill me or make me filthy rich
    Seems like my only prayer these days
    I am someone who never used to care
    For luxury over love in any of the ways

    Money will not get what you are searching for a heart that is filled with love like yours. I hope one day she opens her heart to you again. You deserve every happiness this world has to give you.

    Embraced tightly in these arms of misery
    Empty road won't bring us together anymore
    Though I breathe everyday like I used to
    Yet this heart of mine is too far gone

    Love your ending yaar. I hope the road is not empty for long.
    Excellent job!
    Love you
    Cindy

  • 15 years ago

    by dora

    Powerful poem!! very well written! keep it up. xo

  • 15 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Writing is an excellent outlet for these feelings. It is a shame when people are materialistic and driven by greed. Money can't buy you true love or happiness. The arms of misery is a powerful choice of words emotionally. Nice job!

  • 15 years ago

    by Nee

    Nitin, How come I didn't even notice you posting this poem, my bad :S :S
    Reading this poem reminded me of your old poem "Arms of yesterday" which by the way is still one of my fav poems for you !!

    I think you unrhymed the last stanza on purpose, that was interesting..
    a very captivating end also =]

    There's a candle burning in the name of love
    At this point where the dead end starts
    Life is just one big circle of emotions
    In the end only things bleeding are our hearts

    I think this stanza was the best, great poets know how to begin their poems, well done !!!
    Personally, I think you've written poems better than this one, but you're still great in your writings =)

    Write on
    best of luck
    Missing you !!

  • 15 years ago

    by gracey grey

    Don't much comment on love poem no more, but this one here really touched me. .in fact it makes me feel sad.......really sad......very nicely written :)

  • 15 years ago

    by Trying to hold on

    Brave is the word that describes this piece to me, brave to put this down in writing, brave to try. Hearts are what lets you write, even when they are broken, if you still write theres still the tiniest piece there, take comfort in that, poetry is life, words are the base of our existance. This particular poem flows through a dark moment in your life, rhythm is the beat in which you clearly showed, through deep sadness and pain. Written in such a high standard. well done.

  • 15 years ago

    by ben thompson

    Excellent write my friend. loved the word usage.

  • 15 years ago

    by PURE HEART

    Hi Nitin

    After a long time i read ur poems n i again felt the same vibes i always used to get from your poems. wonderful!
    its really nice to be a part of this site n wonderful poets like u.....5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Sora

    A beautiful write. stunning. an excellent choice of words, very creative. i enjoyed reading this, it was filled with so many emotions. 5/5.

    -Ashlei.

  • 14 years ago

    by Ariana

    I really liked this write. The word choice captures emotion and conveys it to the reader really well, with the ending wrapping everything up nicely. :)

  • 14 years ago

    by shobhana kumar

    Well done on this, Nitin. makes you wonder where good old things like love have gone; in their place, there seems to be only want.

    great job, as always

    shobhana