Very well written.... 5/5

...another awesome piece of poetry

"You're in my hands now Darling,
Because this was your vision of death."

i really like this part especially it being the ending as you have said your vision on death and it is like the devil responding to it.

i really liked this poem.

THAT WAS VERY GOOD KINDA CREEPY BUT IT WAS VERY VISUAL 5/5

The last comment i left was not really acomment so i'll make up for it.

This poem rymed beautifully, and you say it's your first? I think your talent succeeds any category of poetry, this is absolutely flawless and beautifully written :]

5/5

Nice and A good flow too! Liked it. 5/5
And I would have to say...For the first time ever writing something like this, it was AWESOME!

"Northing's as clear as it once was"
`Nothing's.

"But the sheer shadows pressing upon my skin"
`Wow. Word choice is fabulous. I've never heard something worded such as this. It has originality in it for sure. (: Great job!

"Scared, my eyes flutter back open
And I begin to look about"
`I think we can infer that you are scared, but I liked how you actually just came out and said it anyways.

"My mind quickens, urning to know"
`Urning? I've never heard that word. Did you mean yearning?

Overall, yes I did like it. I have never seen something like this from you before. It's just like the other poem I read, it's kind of original. You definatly took the reader into someone's mind. I felt every emotion that you portrayed in the poem so easily, while reading it. Well written. 5/5.

It was written perfectly and very imaginatively so i guess you succeeded of writing the dark poems..You have always a vivid imagination in every poems that you have written..You are a very talented writer..keep it up.xDD

This poem is amazing! I liked the structure, and the rhyming scheme. The words you chose to describe a deathly vision were great, and let you imagine the whole piece.
The subject is also not something many write about, so it's unique in that way too.

Loved it all the way through 5/5

It was amazing!!!!! I love it.....its very original and I dont know......I just really like it....beautiful wording and great imagination! definantly 5/5 and if I could it would be 10/5 lol

Hi there your poem was good in a feaky sort of way, its sad the things that pass through our minds I just asked TJ last night what the hell is wrong with us? poets that is. Well written i enjoyed reading your poem

Grant

As u said u kinda freaked out after u had written it.... the same Happened to me when i had written my poem " My Truant Soul " more likely as yours......

by the way ... good poem

Sweet! this is awesome!

Wow!! Now this poem I honestly really loved!! From the first stanza to the last I couldn't look away it was outstanding! To be completely honest I wasn't expecting it to be so dark and powerful but I was wrong. My favorite stanza of this poem wasss :

I reach out my hand,and feel nothing
But the sheer shadows pressing upon my skin
I open my eyes to see something
A mirror stands before me, no beauty lies within

Haha I honestly loveee the last two lines of this stanza they really stood out to me. I've come across a stanza like this before I don't know where but I know I have. It's so deep and I love the choice of words.

xxxxx Keep it up :)
Mucho Love
Roxy xxxxx

I love your very individual style of writing, more please xp

Wow this is great
really enjoyed reading it,,
keep it up sweety,,xD

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