HEART

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What a wonderful poem. It has its own unique style and is very powerful in its simple words. How difficult it is to describe any emotions involing the heart and yet you did such a beautiful job of prtraying how you feel. It is like insight into how you think. Overall, a very strong poem with a deep meaning. Good job

That was a beautiful poem and has created a bit of thought in my mind, i loved the subject matter , you have a different way of looking at things .Well done

Grant

God gave me life, Filled in a body,
thats a machine.
It has parts, some seen. or unseen,,
there are a few mechanical errors here such as not needing to capitalize the "f" and thats needing to be "that's"

One of them is very very soft,
It beats, that run and stop,
It beats, runs and stops. perhaps this would be more concise

We call it Heart, which God kept clean.

All can be measured, this way or that,
Short or long, overweight or underweight,
Slim or fat or may be mean.
was the mean for rhyme purposes or meant to describe the heart?

How to measure it and by which tool.
I am not able to measure and gone fool.
i would do a comma after tool to increase flow, but this stanza is very shakespearean, i like it :)

Whatever way I weigh it, Its still more.
How much is there, I am not sure,
"it's"and period after sure

I remember I gave u some, but Its still full,
Can u help me, in solving the puzzle,
"it's" and can you help me in solving the puzzle?

Perhaps my friend u dont know,
My Heart is always full of love, it never vacates,
"don't"

Whatever I give u , it fills up again,
Because u return more than I can.
i like this final stanza. i made some mechanical corrections and some corrections to increase the flow, but it is your piece, so your call. i understand ur message tho and it's a good one :) keep plugging away!!

Another poem that i enjoy of yours! Mmm...this poem speaks for itself. well atleast to me it does. i love the poem that i could read them but also hear them. very well written! keep writing
-Stephanie