I thought the emotion of anguish and resentment were presented very well. Though, i also felt a feeling of wanting that person to love you, like you needed the love, not that you wanted it. Two very different feelings. Great Job.

So tell me mother, if I were to die tonight
Would you regret yelling at me all those times?

*Boy does that sound like something I'd say to my mom! Those first two lines really hit home for me.*

Would you cry a tear, if I were to die tonight

*That line bothered me a little because you talked about crying in the lines before it. I;d change it to something else. Maybe "would you notice if I died tonight" something that you haven't said before.*

And for my contentment, please don't forget to smile...before you say goodbye...

*I think this was was the best line of the poem. It has a lingering feeling to it. I think the poem would have been better for me if it was more like the last night. Not your best dear but still a sad and emotional piece. Very simple unlike some of your other poems but I think some liked that. Anyways keep writing :) Nik*

I saw this in the thread, when you posted it for Yaki.
I'm so sorry.. I don't know how it feels to have a mother like her, but I do know that parents can be so crazy..
I really really liked your piece, however, it works better in a song..I'd actually cry.

very well done with sending these emotions right from your heart to the reader's.
Write on~ <3

Wow....amzing. every question everyone wants answerd when thinkning about dieing. YOu are an amzinf writer....keep it up.

victoria

Aww, Myryn... that is so sad. <3 I love you!

I have been reading this so much Myryn.