Luanne
What a heart wrenching piece. I needed my box of tissues when I finished thisd poem.

Now feels like never
and close seems so far away
Moments tick as hours
foregone memories stay

How those memoreis stay with us. Making us ponder our future. Sometimes the memoreies that have caused us pain over shadow the happier ones.

Love a constant battle
fought between heart and mind
Painted smiles and eager kisses
passion and hate entwined

Love and hate are sometimes so closely related. Hopefully you will be able to let go of the pain. Look forward to a future of love.

Sun rises on darkened days
but rain continues to slither
Weeks and months hurry on
soul proceeds to wither

I hope the rain disappears for you and brings you sunshine and smiles. This is my wish for you. You deserve nothing less.

Time stands so very still
within this heart turned to stone
Without a promise of undying love
I'd rather go on my way alone

You make sure you have that promise of undying love. So you can move on to a lifetime of love and happiness.
Excellent job!
Love you
Cindy

Oh my - who hasn't felt like this? Very powerful writing. The last verse is particularly fine.

This is a beautiful but sad write Luanne, It's sad but true that without that feeling of being someones number one, of having their undying love, our world can be covered with sadness. Pure and heartfelt! what can be better!

Nice ur flow was good, short but kept my attention NICE JOB!!!!

I sense a creativity that wells from a reservour deep with raging emotions that must not be kept locked inside.Hi

I sense a creativity that wells from a reservour deep with raging emotions that must not be kept locked inside.Hi

THIS POEM IS F.Y.E!!!

Thank you for the comment on my piece of poetry and also congrats are in order for you too. This was a wonderful piece which I have the pleasure of reading.

I adored the message within this piece, though it was simple it was definitly effective and created a sense of alone over the atmosphere. This poem had alot of emotion entwined with it and the use of memories in the first stanza really let the reader know what you were writing about.

Now feels like never
and close seems so far away
Moments tick as hours
foregone memories stay

The first stanza above was my favorite. The flow of it just rolled off my tongue and stuck in my mind. It was a stanza that really plants itself into your heart.

I found this piece to be lovely and again congrats on your win. You deserve it.
-Mel

That was awsome i have always wanted to do something where i could enter a poem but could never figure it out

Loved the poem :)

Awwww..
I love this poem a lot sweetheart.
It tore my heart to pieces.
Loved the emotions you poured, I swear it made me feel like I'm the one who wrote the piece.

I noticed you haven't written since March 26th, so I thought I'd comfort myself with your old writings until you post a new one.
and I really did love this poem hunn.
Looking forward to some new one :)

Write on
Love you~

I especially liked the first stanza...great poem 5/5