Magic (rictameter)

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The 3rd line only has five syllables whereas it should be six.

The sixth line has ten syllables whereas it should be eight.

The first and last line are meant to be the same in this form.

For the above reasons I didn't like this piece, it seemed like something you just threw together without caring about the end result.

However, tidy it up, fix the mistakes, and I think you could have a beautiful piece here.

Very well done again His Angel. I enjoy reading your poems, Especially when you choose the form "rictameter".

I liked this poem and felt that it was really well done. There isn't much to say, other than the words at points were a little bit forced to make it fit into the type of rythme you wanted.

I felt that this poem was very well done and I really enjoyed the write...it's a subject that is over done on P&Q but I felt that you really made this your own.

5/5

Kissing
Gentle and smooth,
makes me feel loved, safe.(five syllables)
You are very dear to my heart.

I think that the word everything can be arguably 4 syllables (e ver y thing) but when it is spoken it sounds like 3 sylables. So I think this word in my opinion can be argued either way. Hmm? I thought it was just interesting to mention.
I love you with everything that I am.
The miles between are stressful and daunting(that's 10 syllables, ya?)
but I will wait for you.
My one true love
special.

Everything else seems to add up in syllables.
some words may decieve us at times.

wether you agree or disagree, please feel free to comment. :)

I would love to be part of your club just let me know how te sign up, K. ;)