Hopelessly Hopeful

I chose 'steal' cos its like he's taking something thats not his, taking somebody elses time that he's not technically allowed, if you know what i mean :S lol

I'm hopelessly hopeful,
With the back door left open,
Wishing that you would steal in.

*I like this, but what do you mean by steal in...I'd change it to come in*

I gaze from the window,
Taking comfort from the glow,
The sunset is still leaking.

*I like this stanza. It written beauitfully. I love the imagery. Great work here*

Then darkness has fallen,
Suddenly and all around,
It makes my blood turn to ice.

*I like how you go from light to dark. Very clever idea. It gives the poem movement*

My hands cup my eyes and,
I remember our good-byes,
Why were you calm and so nice?

*I lovethe use of rheotrical questions*

Tears fall from swollen lids,
Of your cold eyes I need rid,
From walls I've built in my mind.

*I really like how this poem flows..it's very different.*

But try as I might, I
Cannot lose this fight, Because
You are my charm and my life.

*Such a sad poem. I can relate to know wanting to lose someone. Great work here. Keep it up. Nik*