5 Months and Still Dreaming.

Vanessa
You did a good job portraying your emotions in this piece.
Good job!
Take care
Cindy

5 months of thinking,
Failing,
Procrastination,
Pain.
I'm afraid that all my words
I have yet to say
Are now ______ out.

^Not fond of the word flooding here, especially since you use it in the next line.

Spilling down my face, flooding your floor.
Tired of trying to hide my fear
Of being alone,
Being fake,
Forgetting.

^A few less filler words

My dreams carry into my day,
Colors replace the ground and sky
I'm stuck staring at a man with a picture covering his face, we're saying goodbye, and I am crying in a room as dark as his heart.
When I wake my eyes are wet and my heart is broken,
They never let me see what happens.

^As an example I just went through and cleaned up the lines a bit. All in all it was a nice write and you had a few good images in there:

colors replace the ground and sky

This one made me stop and think what it would be like because the ground and sky are colour, would I be floating in a void of swirling colours...very nice. Some good work.

I have to give you a 5/5 for this one. it reminds me of my life. I day dream all the time to escape this world, But have learned to live, but not love this world I am in. great poem.
Aaron

I really loved reading your poem. I felt all the words of it and can relate. Thanks for inviting me to read as it was a pleasure.