Comments : The Art of a Kiss

  • 11 years ago

    by DerXLoveIsDeadX

    I love it... lol I did not start this one with AWWW lol

  • 11 years ago

    by Natausha

    Very, very, very well done!!!

  • 11 years ago

    by Cotton Candy Clouds

    Amazing job!!! you used the perfect words and painted an outstanding picture in my head i honestly wouldn't change a thing about this it just makes me want to have that in my life : / 5/5 ! ((i voted for you !!))

  • 11 years ago

    by Tamon G

    "You are the ultimate artist
    Our perfect painting titled 'Bliss'
    All because you've mastered
    The art of a kiss"

    Ultimate artist indeed. Very well done, keep up the good work

  • 11 years ago

    by I am

    IT IS SO SIZZLING
    I ENJOYED IT

  • 11 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Good job. You have captured and expressed the feelings a first kiss. Even though I am older now, I still have memories of that first kiss and you brought them back for awhile. The last verse brings it all together and is the perfect end to the poem. Keep up the good work.

    "You are the ultimate artist
    Our perfect painting titled 'Bliss'
    All because you've mastered
    The art of a kiss"

  • 11 years ago

    by Hollymariee

    A simple smile and
    We know what is to come
    This interwoven love
    Can't be overcome

    I don't really like the rhyme here . For most of the poem , the flow seems really off . Maybe do a syllable count ? And personally , if you removed the last 4 stanzas , I think the poem would be so much stronger . You wouldn't mention the title , which makes poems really lovely and it would be a little more vague . Well done .. But there are a few touch ups . 4/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Mr Rhee

    Staring at each other
    Speaking volumes with our eyes.
    Its so silent
    You can hear our hearts sight.

    This first stanza is perfect! This says it all. So young, and already gifted with a heart that sees and feels the wonder of it all. You've been baptized. Great piece.