Amazing job!!! you used the perfect words and painted an outstanding picture in my head i honestly wouldn't change a thing about this it just makes me want to have that in my life : / 5/5 ! ((i voted for you !!))
Good job. You have captured and expressed the feelings a first kiss. Even though I am older now, I still have memories of that first kiss and you brought them back for awhile. The last verse brings it all together and is the perfect end to the poem. Keep up the good work.
"You are the ultimate artist
Our perfect painting titled 'Bliss'
All because you've mastered
The art of a kiss"
A simple smile and
We know what is to come
This interwoven love
Can't be overcome
I don't really like the rhyme here . For most of the poem , the flow seems really off . Maybe do a syllable count ? And personally , if you removed the last 4 stanzas , I think the poem would be so much stronger . You wouldn't mention the title , which makes poems really lovely and it would be a little more vague . Well done .. But there are a few touch ups . 4/5