Wait- I Know I Will

by Tim Mauntler   Nov 10, 2008


The time for commitment
Comes on it's own
No set time
Not written in stone
I know it's hard
But here's what you do
You got to wait
I'll do it with you

Cause you have this effect
Where I stutter and shake
It's almost a disease
The heart's what it takes
It's all up to you
I said it day one
Just one word
And it's all over- done
But...

You can trust me to stay
I promise I'll stand still
You just gotta wait
I know I will

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  • 15 years ago

    by Teria

    "Cause you have this effect" << effect = affect.

    "And it's all over- done
    But..."
    ^^ " And it's all over, done."

    - I get with the lines above that you're trying to have a good connection with the two stanzas by using "and", but personally I think it's better without it and it still gets the point across, just less bluntly. I've always thought 'and' was just a blunt word and should only be used if needed, and it's definitely not needed here.

    You have a great poem, I like how you put it together. The fact that there doesn't seem to be a reasonable syllable count from line to line is good. but, what's so good about is that you pulled it off. A lot of people cut the lines off at the wrong time or make one too long and one too short. But, you did a good job with it. And, it's a great poem. Really relatable.

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