Horizon Of Hope (sonnet)

Reach through a rainbow to caress a star,
Savour its shimmering song from afar.
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What an absolutely wonderful couple of sentences. whimsical and magical. You are the bringer of sunshine Michael

"Hidden behind songbirds' musical notes,
Dances a projection, spiralling smoke.
Woven in whispers, a prophecy dream,
Alluring the physical, still unseen."

~ Ah, wow. Already you've drawn me into the piece. The word choice is stunning, and it flows amazingly well. The rhyming is wonderful, as well.

"Reach through a rainbow to caress a star,
Savour its shimmering song from afar.
A fresh cool mist of breath is surrounding,
Heart's promise yearning, feel it resounding."

~ Another beautiful stanza, but that doesn't surprise me. You have a way with words, and you're able to create a gorgeous image in the mind of the reader. The first two lines in this stanza absolutely blew me away. The words are easily understood, but not simple.

"Kisses from angels rain down from the clouds,
Releasing a dove from protective shroud.
Watch as her wing beat takes hope far away
To a place where love waits, lighting sunrays."

~ I'm going to question something here: in the second line, shouldn't it say.. "..from a protective shroud.."? I could be mistaken, I just thought I'd point it out in case you just missed it. Other than that, this stanza is great. :]

"Could this hope drown in a sea of damned men?
..No, for she returns with Loves' Olive stem."

~ This ending is perfect. I like how you asked a question, but answered it also. Also, the word choice is, once again, fabulous.

A wonderfully written poem. Five out of five. [5/5]

Briana

Very nice. Lovely word pictures.

First stanza takes me to a place surreal. Like a mind game where one sees but cannot touch. "Woven in whispers, a prophecy dream"..........wow. Nice choice of words. In retrospect, 'dream' and 'smoke' don't actually last......kinda sad actually.

3rd stanza, you mentioned "dove".
Actually 'dove' to me signifies besides peace, of purity......and for hope to be taken away again is rather sad, but the last line shows a flicker of hope. The word choice here again is superb......."for she returns with love' olive stem" or branch......a gesture worth the wait :) Very nice.

Michael
Your Sonnet is beautiful...The imagery is awesome and your talent is shining in this piece.

Hidden behind songbirds' musical notes,
Dances a projection, spiralling smoke.
Woven in whispers, a prophecy dream,
Alluring the physical, still unseen.

This brings such a image of tender passion to the minds eye.

Reach through a rainbow to caress a star,
Savour its shimmering song from afar.
A fresh cool mist of breath is surrounding,
Hearts of promise feel it resounding.

What a touching stanza....getting the feeling of the magic of love.

Kisses from angels rain down from the clouds,
Releasing a dove from protective shroud.
Watch as her wing beat takes hope far away
To a place where love waits, lighting sunrays.

This just makes me want to be in that place to be feeling the warmth of love again.

Could this hope drown in a sea of damned men?
..No, for she returns with Loves' Olive stem.

Perfect ending :)
~Clapping~
Excellent job!
(((hugs)))
Cindy