Lovers tryst (poem of an oil painting of two lovers)

by Grant Gilbert AKA Slash   Nov 13, 2008


Lovers tryst

An oil painted serenade
Caressed in satin salmon shades
They spent a night of sweet romance
Forever captured at a glance

The two were one in days of old
She was shy, but he was bold
Together then, their love did grow
Caught in oils, that all would know

Hidden breasts and seductive thighs
Enhanced once more by lovers sighs
Sweet smells of jasmine in the air
Caught in time in their lovers lair

Enticing kisses at lovers tryst
Seductive tease seen through the mists
Portrayed in oils for all to see
Their love revealed for eternity

Grant
13h31
13.11.2008
Copyright © 2008 Grant Mark Gilbert

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  • 10 years ago

    by Fran

    Such evocative and dream like imagery. If I close my eyes I can see ervery detail of that painting in my mind. Superbly written.

  • 11 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    That's brilliant and was great for that painting.

    No wonder you won. XD

    Absolutely astounding.

    It didn't go on forever, but wasn't too short, it said what needed to be in a rhythemic and descriptive way and got the point across. Well done. Five out of five. :]

  • 11 years ago

    by Crystal Rose Blooming

    What an absolutely wonderful poem. A weekly winner for sure, I will join the others in nominating it.

  • 11 years ago

    by Dark Savior

    Hey Grant, I haven't don't many of your poems as I haven't been able to get to know you.

    Well onto my review of your poem.

    This poem is very well done, it's words are perfect, it's flow is almost perfect, there is one line that sets it off, and the scheme is amazing.

    It's one of my favorite poems that I've done and I'm adding it to my favorite poems. It really shows what you've been able to do if given the chance.

    I've read other pieces from you, but they were no where near the calibur of this piece. It's really amazing and one of the best poems that I've seen in a long time that can truly make me think "this is a good poet/poem"

    The only thing that I would look at adjusting is "Enticing kisses at lovers tryst
    Seductive tease seen through the mists"

    Perhaps

    "Sensual tease, for living bliss" or something along those lines.

    I mean, honestly the poem Is right spot on. It's one of the really great poems.

    As well I have put it up for this weeks poetry contest, This will only be the third poem I have put up there ever, since I have been a member of this site. If you check I've been one for a very long time, that will tell you how impressed I was with this piece that you've done.

    5/5 of course.

  • 11 years ago

    by Brittany C

    I liked this poem. It talked of love and art. Great poem. I gave it a 5/5.

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