Swimming Pool

Standing at the bottom of the swimming pool
Thinking about the air

^^ I like the opening. It creates a visual that's breathtaking...and it's how a lot of us feel when we look at our lives.

But that doesn't really matter
Wait, it matters, I just don't care

^^ That line really scares me. Because not only is it coming from you, it reflects how i treat a lot of the things in my life.

Slipping down the razor
As the razor slips down me

^^ The wording is beautiful, really. Just, switching it and then giving it a new meaning in the second line...creative, as always.

The ending of the crashing sunset
Last movement in this symphony

^^ It made me cry, to tell you the truth. It's a sad poem..

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