Comments : Across the Sea

  • 11 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Yes time and distance conquers love..love is
    tough at times but somehow we get through
    it with smiles..a lovely read.

  • 11 years ago

    by Grant Gilbert AKA Slash

    Wow Crystal what a beautiful poem i was pleased and saddened on reading it , pleased because i've hade the profound pleasure of watching you *bloom and blossom * since you arrived on this site and graced us with your beauty *like this poem*.
    Saddened because i know why you have this terrible longing, be strong Crystal someone as special as you will never be alone, know that at least for now you are much loved by myself and fellow members of this site that have taken the time to get to know you
    I have nothing to add about your poem i think it was flawless

    Grant

  • 11 years ago

    by The Queen

    Ouchh..a coffee in the morning and a piece like this, made my heart remember those times of pains and loneliness. Words used were flawless, very touching and came from the heart.

  • 11 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Beautifully written, the flow is excellent. The reader can feel the emotions of the poem, sadness, pain, being alone, longing, what is in your heart. Very well done.

  • 11 years ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Crystal,

    this poem is so full of imagery that it is easy for the reader to see what your mind is projecting, what your heart is crying, what your longing touch is aching to feel. The ocean is a powerful force and its mystery, splendour and magic lends itself perfectly to this poems theme.

    ((hugs)) to you.

    Michael

  • 11 years ago

    by Cara

    Wow, this was so emotional.. truely amazing. the pain and longing crept out through your words and really gave me a look inside your heart.. nice work.

    my favourite line was
    Winds of change blow full the sails of desire
    ^^ wow... is all i have to say.

    5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Katherine

    Intense and deep I would have to say. For time can also make people become distant. You have to watch out. But if the love is true it can surpass anything. 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    Ooo unfurl, good word usage. XD

    The second to last stanza made me go :(. It was sad. The last stanza brought hope though, which was a great way to end the poem seeing how it's a love poem. I really liked how you stuck with the ocean theme instead of doing a bunch of unrelated metaphors. That was cool. Five out of five.

  • 11 years ago

    by Trish Danforth

    Thats adorable!

  • 11 years ago

    by Faithless

    The journey which you have taken the readers is truly breath taking indeed
    i love this stanza:

    Imagination unfurls the restriction of distance
    Closing my eyes, you materialize before me
    My hands slip into yours and we hold tight
    Feeling the warmth of each other's touch spread

    Excellent job:
    5/5 from me