Catwoman
by Katie Dec 23, 2008
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My life such a bore |
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15 years ago
by Faithless
My life such a bore
I always wanted something more
Now he's killed me,
I'll be something for sure.
-Well the opening from my understanding is the birth of her alter ego, tts great
Sewing, sewing
my leather suit of black.
I'll soon make those
men go mad.
Be careful
I'm not just a woman,
I'm also a cat.
-here you have protrayed the transformation from an ordinary woman to a someone new
The only thing that can stop me,
a man that's also a bat.
Ok this is a cute anding but i wouldn't put "also a bat" cause that sounds as if"he is also a cat"... maybe u would like to rephrase it to " a man who happens to be a bat"
Well other than tt great job5/5 -
15 years ago
by H E Losey
Was there a rhyme (first stanza yes?)?
Metre -
15 years ago
My life such a bore
I always wanted something more
Now he's killed me,
I'll be something for sure.
^^oh alright : ) great opening it was intriguing and interesting i haven't read somethin like this in a while
Sewing, sewing
my leather suit of black.
I'll soon make those
men go mad.
Be careful
I'm not just a woman,
I'm also a cat.
^^ : ) very clever! i love cat woman! so i can say this stanza made me smile
The only thing that can stop me,
a man that's also a bat.
^^bat man is cute!! : ) great ending
unique poem! 5/5 -
15 years ago
by isabel
My life such a bore
I always wanted something more
Now he's killed me,
I'll be something for sure.
The beginning is a little bit confusing... You are important because you die? - didn't quite understand your thought...
Sewing, sewing
my leather suit of black.
I'll soon make those
men go mad.
Be careful
I'm not just a woman,
I'm also a cat.
this stanza is cute... It has an original flow and it makes me giggle ;)
The only thing that can stop me,
a man that's also a bat.
Pretty much understanded what your influences were, even without the remark :)
Altogether:
A good poem, yet a simple one... You should try to use a couple more stylistic devices... It might look better...
I also believe you could explain the beginning a little better, as welll ... the first stanza is usually what draws the reader in...
*keep up*
isabel
