Your words create a somber mood that
cannot be overlooked. I really like the
second stanza for it holds very deep meanings..touching write.

Wow, what emotion and in-deepth feelings are depicted here, really nice job! All your lines set the scene perfectly and had me entranced. Not much else I can say, flawless in my mind. When I read your title I thought of Fawkes from Harry Potter for some reason cause he's a Phoenix.....Beautiful wording, 5/5 from me...