Her Demise

All in all, I liked this write.

First off, the flow is really good, with truly unusual and interesting rhyme scheme. I rarely like the rhymes in poems, but yours worked so well, creating awesome rhythm.

The number of 'her' throughout the poem bothered me in a few of stanzas, but that's the only critique I have for this poem.

It's truly touching, it made me quite sad while I was reading it. It's great when the write can touch someone's emotions, and this one surely did that to me, especially the ending.
Also, the wording is powerful from the beginning to the end. You simply painted with words, portraying memorable scenes.

Well done.

First of all..I'd like to say sorry for not reading your poems regularly.
Back to the poem...what a great, catchy rhyme scheme..I've used this once but with three-lined stanzas.
that was really good.
The simplicity of this piece is very well expressed and it went right straight to the point.

Death a prayer she's holding tight
A wish to never see the light
Angels steal her soul tonight
Finally she feels free

This is my fave stanza, I'm always inspired by last stanzas..so this one was really great =)
I love your poems..I'm gonna try reading few of what I missed

And you write on !
xx