Wow... I really enjoyed this poem... My favorite part was probably...

"But I keep bleeding for the rest of forever
for the one that's close to my heart, my beloved
At least now you know that I love you
But too bad, ... I'm your bleeding love"

it was very touching... and I love the title!!!... Great pice of work!! 8) 5/5!!

Very good indeed, i especially like many of the rhymes in this poem such as "away" and "disarray"

Your Servant:
D. Johnson.

This is a very sad and emotional poem, I really enjoyed reading it =] The overall flow of the poem could be changed a little here or there but other than that its a very beautiful piece so I will give it a 5/5

It's beginning to crack
Beginning has too many syllables , it don't match the rest of the staza . Try starting .

I can't handle all of this pain
Take out all of , it flows better .

but I feel as if I'm going to die
but I feel like i'm going to die .. Hah shorten it up ! You're the first person I commented on that I have to suggest to take out syllables .

My heart is being stabbed by a 1000 knives
I don't have a suggestion for this line .. Other than to change it .. I really don't like it .

But instead my heart just broke apart
try to avoid the repetition in this stanza .. And somehow get rid of heart .
But instead it's broken , right torn apart .

But I keep bleeding for the rest of forever
for the one that's close to my heart, my beloved
At least now you know that I love you
But too bad, ... I'm your bleeding love
This whole last stanza needs work . The second line needs to be changed completely , with a better rhyming word for love .

But I keep bleeding for the rest of forever
For you're what my nightmares are made of
At least you know how I've felt all along
It's a shame .. That i'm bleeding all your love .

Something like that ? It flows better and the rhymes are a little better too .. And it has no repetition . Haha um , other than those things .. I really like the idea . The only reason I could help you out is because it was easy to get into and understand how you were feeling . Good job , but needs some work . 4/5

First off, thanks for stopping by and commenting on my poem. :)
Now, I can easily relate to this poem, especially seeing as most of what I write is directed towards one person that I've loved for a very long time, but havent been together with for years. So, for me, this poem hit home, and hard! great job!
Hopeless Romantic