Glass Shards

by AngelicDecadence   Feb 22, 2009


Crystal pieces fall in succession,
Like the splash from a shore,
My, they leave quite an impression,
A beautiful disaster left across the floor.

Little cuts along the way,
Annoy but don't cause much pain,
Just keep all feelings at bay,
No one wants to be put to shame.

Tiny nicks in the sands of time,
But those small things, they still tore,
Leaving tiny holes as big as dimes,
These glass shards litter us a bit more.

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  • 14 years ago

    by Hollow Emotion

    Crystal pieces fall in succession,
    Like the splash from a shore,
    My, they leave quite an impression,
    A beautiful disaster left across the floor.

    *beautiful beginning, and i love the rhyming in it*

    Little cuts along the way,
    Annoy but don't cause much pain,
    Just keep all feelings at bay,
    No one wants to be put to shame.

    *telling the reader what the shards are doing... nice.*

    Tiny nicks in the sands of time,
    But those small things, they still tore,
    Leaving tiny holes as big as dimes,
    These glass shards litter us a bit more.

    *i like this part, saying no matter how small something can be, they can leave a big impact... nice job, the rhyming and flow was great, it was nice to read!*

  • 14 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    It feels as though you're trying to express feeling that have been kept bottled inside. The imagery really helped to move your work.

  • 15 years ago

    by HvN

    Great word choice and amazing ryme and flow!

    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Tangible heartache

    Oh wow. thats really good.

    5/5