Glass Shards

Crystal pieces fall in succession,
Like the splash from a shore,
My, they leave quite an impression,
A beautiful disaster left across the floor.

*beautiful beginning, and i love the rhyming in it*

Little cuts along the way,
Annoy but don't cause much pain,
Just keep all feelings at bay,
No one wants to be put to shame.

*telling the reader what the shards are doing... nice.*

Tiny nicks in the sands of time,
But those small things, they still tore,
Leaving tiny holes as big as dimes,
These glass shards litter us a bit more.

*i like this part, saying no matter how small something can be, they can leave a big impact... nice job, the rhyming and flow was great, it was nice to read!*

It feels as though you're trying to express feeling that have been kept bottled inside. The imagery really helped to move your work.

Great word choice and amazing ryme and flow!

5/5

Oh wow. thats really good.

5/5