Comments : Lingering Warmth

  • 10 years ago

    by Mezmeryz

    Hi, i have to say, at first sight the length of this (the fact that it looks likea flow of words) put me off, however, as i read on, i realised just how beautiful a write this is. I love it because you wrote your emotions just how they are and its so sad, deep and heartfelt, i could almost feel your pain. i truly enjoyed your use of vocabulary/language, and the imagery was awesome too.

    the flowers don't look as vibrant now, the stars don't glow nearly as bright

    ^^my favourite line!! so naturally expressed your feelings, I love it!

    Maybe its just me, but i think i would have enjoyed reading it a little more, if you layed this out as stanzas, spaced it out a bit, rather than making it look like a flow of words... =] Just what i think.
    But your words are truly beautiful, no doubt.

    Well done, don't stop writing.

    MEZi x

  • 10 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    What else can I say I am very impressed