Soul Trapped in Solitude

by SilentSuicide   Mar 10, 2009


My shadows surpass my light
Striking agony among bloodshot eyes.
My heart grows solid in a rush of cold mist.
In pieces, silence awaits me.

No one can distinguish
My pain nor its faithful cause.
To the point of it's peek of misery.
Solitude is all i know.

I feel the earth closing in around me.
The mist dissolves everything to darkness.
Alone i remain in this empty society.
Locked in a cell known as my unstable mind.

Silence shrikes through the night.
I feel safer to just close my eyes.
To imagine deep beneath my lonely thoughts.
I had something to open my eyes to.

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  • 14 years ago

    by XxHiis BooxX

    Hey,
    that was really good
    i like the metaphors and the atmosphere of this poem...really good

    and the ending was really good...
    i love that part

    "though you live in a lonely world but yet you are still thinking positive bout the imagination that you can look forward to when you close ur eyes"

    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by loving my kids tessa and savannah

    Good work expressing your self and keep it up

  • 15 years ago

    by Faithless

    Wow i like the metaphors and the atmosphere which you have crafted into this poem. I can feel the feeling of loneliness as the world come crashing down on you.

    Silence shrikes through the night.
    I feel safer to just close my eyes.
    To imagine deep beneath my lonely thoughts.
    I had something to open my eyes to.

    -I like how you end it though you live in a lonely world but yet you are still thinking positive bout the imagination that you can look forward to when you close ur eyes

    Excellent Job
    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    I get a sense of how you're feeling through this poem because I can relate and your words were so deep and moving. You worded this piece perfectly, and ended it perfectly as well. The descriptions were good and the flow was great. Overall, a great write, and a great read :] 5/5

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