Wasteland

This love i give to
you.It may come
from a broken
heart,But it is
very true.

^simple word but great meanin. even tho ur heart is broken u can still feel and give love has a unbroken corazon.

I'm the girl with
the hurtful past.
My pain hidden well.
This smile wont last.

^as many can relate to this part. many have hateful, hurtful wantin to erase past. but we gonna move on with the people around us to help.

I have so much to offer.
But you cant see until
i break my shell.
I come from a hellish
past.I might be bruised
but i am not broken.

^I like your words here. " I Might be bruised but i am not broken" my favorite words in this part

I may not show you
the real me.Its so
hard i want you to see.

^sumtime people could see the real u without u wantin to. n thatz is rarley wen ppl do. n those u want to keep close by you. everyone is afriad to show the real selfs.

My shattered soul was
left on the ground for all
to see.With wide eyes
everyone passes by.

^very imaginie here. i could see them just walk right by n not even care. says a lot

My heart is big with so
much love.I gave it
away as a give just
to be given back.

^i like this part

I promise i can be
better.Please save
me from my wasteland.

^remind me of a song. called wasteland too but just forgot from who. what the song said it's very powerful n meaning ful. like this part here.

I have good intentions.
Help me please I gave
you my heart just don't
tear it apart

^we're all afriad of getting our corazon's broken but takin a chance to see it can not be broken if u gave it the person whom is gonna protect n chreish it forever. i like it. sumpart flow was off but nice pice
4/5

TaKe CaRe,
Frenchy

Eveything was great except for the first stanza, you miht want to change it. The flow was a little off compared to the others. But othe than that i could feel your emotions and i loved that. i also loved the title too. Great work. Shanik