Do yo know

I am ashamed.
Your tears are
forever engraved.
I love your smile.
It always makes
me stay for a while.

^hmm... the flow was off in the end. n like tears they can be scars for sum. once i saw my madre cry cuz of me. that lift me a scar deep inside my heart that no matter it wnt heal cuz I am the one that made her cry n that is sumthin i can forget or forgive...... n well it wasnt a bad way of openin ur poem.

I love you heart even
tho i tore that apart.
I love your soul.
Even tho its been shattered.

^in the end the flow went off once again.

I miss your voice but now
i have no choice.My pain is
deep down in my core.

^ hmm... you lost me in this part. have no choice? we all have a choice no matter what tho.

I know its deserved.
I wounder what your
thinking.I wounder
if you think I'm heartless.

^ are u saying wonder? or wait... idk once again im lost.

I know this isn't how i
started.I wounder if you
question my love.

^i think are are sayin "wonder" if u are u spelled it wrong. if u did on purpose then left it. but it got me confused.

Truth be told no ones above.
I wounder if you think I'm trash.
i wounder if you know i hate
myself.Self pity gets me no where.

^ first line here very powerful. that no one is great. nicely done.

I hope you no your my life.I hope
you know nothing you do would
make me love you less.I'm sorry
i stabbed your back so i take the knife.
I drive it in my heart so i can take your
pain.
I may sound insane.I do know
I'm the one to blame

^a bit confusing. lost in sum parts. but i like it tho. it does have a meaning n ur emotions are right there. nicely done
4/5

Take caRe,
Frenchy

***WOW**...When i read it my jaw dropped. That was amazing. U are a very good writer... Deep..Very deep