Comments : Fractions

  • 12 years ago

    by Chocolate Addict

    You have a very nice intro to your poem. I like how you slowly unfurl your poem revealing the meaning to your poetry title

    Poison pulses within our hearts
    The blood that's been bled all but dry
    Flaking off our loves pretenses
    We've become the image we despise

    -This stanza really stood out for me. The description that u used in this stanza really captivate me

    Nice Job

  • 12 years ago

    by Jad

    This was a interesting poem but I still liked it. You had a good rhyme. The idea of the poem is good. You had emotion. I liked the way you worded the poem. Good job.

  • 12 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    The rhythm of your words never missed a beat as you seemed to pick up the pieces your heart

    So well done!

  • 12 years ago

    by Not Enough

    Hmm, I don't really like this one. It doesn't really make sense to me, I guess I just miss the big pibture of it. And it just seems way to over-played like poeple always write these type of poems. And it just gets to be too much. But it's not a bad poem, and it has a good flow to it. But I think you could make it a little more unique, even though it already is quite unique. The vocabulary makes it a little more orignial.

    Soda E>

  • 12 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    I like this piece. ((: It's kind of simple, but full of meaning at the same time. Although the flow seemed a little up and down because of the uneven lines, the poem didn't seem forced or anything, because of the rhyming. Your emotions were clearand expressed perfectly through your wordss. Great write. Keep it upp ((: 5/5.

  • 12 years ago

    by PorcelainMoon

    I'm not going to sit here and get formal about this poem and tell you to change it, like most of the dried up viginas on this site.

    This poem spoke to me and I thought it was beautiful. 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    Loved this!!! Gosh you blow my mind with yuor amazing rhyming skill!!! Lol you are so talented. Can't wait to you write more. You should try free verse...I bet that would fit you well. Anyways nice job hun. Nik