I smiled.. and cried the whole time i read this baby.. i really love this poem.. it makes me feel better.. i love you baby..

Great job!!! Aw! I wish I had that!!

Well this is a beautiful love poem with such a free flowing sharing of emotion and feelings. The poem really speaks for itself

well done

This poem is one of my favorite styles. I love the repeat beginning and end. I love that and feel that this poem is one that I can honestly say is really worth a read.

I liked the poem but felt that it was written with pure and raw emotion and had a lot of run on sentences.

I enjoyed this poem and felt it was a good poem and definitly worth the read.

Thank you very much for sharing your thoughts and dreams with us.

Love it, its so deep and meaningfull i really am soo jealous of you lol as for the poem i give it a 5/5 amazingly wonderfull congratz

Hes just your sun. And you are just a person?
That's not true. From your writing I can concur that you have a kind and loving deposition. You are a very nice person. And the way you write is flawless and absolutely brilliant. Each piece I have read hold touches of vibrancy, delicacy, love, sadness, and perhaps loneliness. Yes thats it. You seem so lonely. Even when you are with someone you feel alone. Perhaps because maybe they cannot relate and understand. You have emotions that change a lot from what im guessing. And it's hard for you to stay in one mood all day. Thats not abnormal though. I am the exact same way. It's difficult to fight the inner turmoil and on the outside try and appease everyone around us. I know that i lack the grace and finesse of most individuals. I get really down in the dumps some days. My past holds darkness. Lights didn't shine for me a lot back in those days. This piece was beautiful and i felt the love. But also the confusion. And the desperation to be perfect. No one is perfect. But we all are imperfectly perfect. You have a great talent with words and capturing the right emotion in each of your pieces. I enjoyed this one.
Great job.
Bravo.
*applauds*
5/5

-Lilium