Dying With Love

You know, I admire you for the different styles you use. It's refreshing to read things that are a bit different. :)

Can't say this was the best I've read from you, but there were some great moments here:

'Death comes easy to those who wait,
testing purity and strength of taste.'

First line has been delivered so many times in poetry, it's become trite unfortunately. Your flow was sharp and the half rhyme worked in your favour, you used a harsh consonant sound which was a nice touch.

'ike those that sit for love but come too late,
filtered veins flow through thinning waists.'

This was excellent, yet I can't help noticing that 'waists' throws it off, forgive me if I'm wrong but 'wrists' would be so much more effective, unless you're trying to convey something else metaphorically here. I also understand you have a 'rhyme' thing going on so there is that as well, but don't sacrifice rhyme for meaning.

'grips of reapers claw for stones,
oozing the warmth of winter's glow.'

Grips and claws are too much for one sentence, a stronger verb would benefit you here. Second line was excellent, can't escape this feeling of morbidity exuding from this piece.

'for glimmering diamonds choked to bones,
dear hearts race so fast they slow.'

Your words hit hard, and with that punctuating flow too makes it all the more effective. I don't think you need 'for'. Strong wording here.

'web of charms lead snow astray,
as flakes of sight begin to swim.'

Liked the idea of the 'web'; and since you show the reader a lot here, it's open to interpritation. Really professional. Admirable writing, only thing about this stanza that stood out was the rest of the stanzas all end with a similar sound. E.G. the first stanza had the 'ai' sound, the second stanza had the 'oh' sound but this third stanza has an inconsistent sound. Just a minor thing I thought I'd point out. :)

'darkness drives silhouettes away,
sobbing smiles at sorrow's limbs.'

This was great, though. That sibilance conveying a hissing sound. Loved it.

'death comes easy to those who wait,
like those that love, but love too late.'

Nice ending, fitting, now that I think about it. Just think the delivery could have been sharper with that first line.

Great write, as usual. Keep it up!