Comments : The demon's kiss [Ottava rima]

  • 11 years ago

    by Phantasmagoria

    This was fairly lyrical
    i liked the style, it was very much unlike anything i've heard of or read previously.

    Forsaken in their arms, away,
    Those crows, covering the sunlight,

    To his whispers, my soul surrendered in credence.

    these were my favourite lines....the imagery was good and crows have very much symbolic meaning here

  • 10 years ago

    by Sourav

    Liked the darkness of the poem. Flow is good too. Well done!

  • 10 years ago

    by Fran

    Atmospheric and chilling. Superb!

  • 9 years ago

    by Acoustic Odyssey

    Beautifully dark! I loved the darkness in your words, these dark images were absolutely brilliant! And the form was different, and you definitely nailed it. Amazing work!
    Take care