I really like this it shows a number of emotions. i like the repitition of the second stanza also the words used and the power they display through the poem for example "dont cut too deep, dont draw too much blood from me" i like those words because it is showing that he has given in to whoever it is and is letting them cut him but only to a certain extent. Great lyrics all in all 5/5 good work.

Very interesting write. The poem or lyrics was really good though I can't relate myself to your topic. The flow of the poem was good. The rhyming though was good as well but it seemed to me that it was forced in some areas. The emotion in this was also very clear by the way at the end you explode and start telling off the person. The imagery was not really all that great but then again you don't need it all the time. Overall this was a really good poem and I am giving you a 5/5. Good job.

I like this poem, very creative, keep writing :)

This poem is sort of a mystery to me. I don't know why so many people write about such a topic, i know that it seems like something you have to get off your chest, but you shouldn't do it with a lyric or a poem.

I felt that the poem was a little on the less structured side. I've read through it and felt that it could have been done more structured. This is something that takes away from it majorly.

I liked your vocabulary, it was very well estiblished and feel that you can put it to good use. You can always learn anything but a good vocab is the basis for any muscian/poet.

Well done.