This is really moving, brilliantly writen piece speaking of a lost love. The emotions stand out with each statement. What i loved most about this poem is how the sentences complement each other building the emotion even more. Some of your rhymes did not quite fit but did not interrupt the flow. Brilliant write. Keep up.

This was so sad. I felt so much hurt in this poem. I love how easy you make it for readers to reate to what you are saying. This really touched my heart Austin. You have such a gift. Thanks for sharing. :) Nik

This was a very sad and emotionally expressive poem, your flow was carried throughout the piece very well and your rhyming was very good =] A very beautifull and honest poem!

Love the title. and this is a very interesting poem.5/5

Brilliant peice, there is a lot of emotion and i love the intensity of the poem the flow was great and your rhyming as well i loved it 5/5

I found this poem a bit shaky, as if the rhymes were forced and the flow a little off in places. In some stanzas (like the first) you seemed to have written it and confined yourself to the idea of four lines in each verse, and stuck to it in a sense that made it seem incomplete. Yet in other placed your choice of the amount was well thought out. All in all it was a nice write. Hope to read more soon (;

This poem reflected emotion very well. The only thing I would consider, but is not necessary is to even the syllable count in the last two lines

I think anyone who's lost someone in their life, will relate to this. it's just a beautiful and inspiring piece. well done, be proud of this :]

5/5

Incredibly beautiful
I found the flow okay and the wordswere nicely well chosen
Really impressive poem...

Awe...i could feel the saddness and the longing. Wow..very great poem. keep it up.

victoria

Amazing write 5/5

Amazing