Houses That Were Never Homes.....

by Jenna   Jun 19, 2009


Mother I know you're happy now,
But in this house you've left me all alone.
You tried for many years now,
To make the houses we lived in, homes.
It just didn't turn out that way, as you can see,
Emotional wounds may heal, but the scars will be there for eternity.....

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  • 14 years ago

    by Dark Savior

    This poem a lot of people can relate to, but aren't sure what to think of it.

    I'm going to give you a bit of a break down. This poem is really well done and I loved the ending, I felt that the ending is what really made it stand out in my mind, that honestly sounds like a philosophical quote.

    There are a few things i would suggest that you do. Stop putting the .... at the end of any sentence, if you want a break that is what the english language created periods and colon's for. The poem needs to be less direct and more of a metaphor, it's how the style of writing came about, a lot of people like it and feel it's the true way a poet is seperated from writers.

    I feel that this poem is truly one that you can feel the scar with the person. Each line was like it's own little cut that severed the soul, it's really a good poem and felt it was a well versed poem and the ending was astonishing.

    Very well done.

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