'Nothing's everlasting
for the roads are long and winding'
`Maybe say 'life's roads are long and winding' because really- thats what youre referring to right? or do you mean love's path?

'littered with debris of broken hearts;
but it's worth all the struggle
for everything's photographed.'
`Loved how you said its littered with broken hearts- you just recently used that in another poem of yours. Definatly love can be worth the struggle at times. I didnt particularly understand your last line. Did you mean something along that lines that things can change?

'but when in the arms of a loved'
`Maybe say 'loved one' or 'arms of our love' - something like that. ;) Loved how you said that when we're in their arms it feels like time just stops. We are stuck in the beauty of the moment.

'through the beauty of the expedition
that's raveling within your heart.'
`Loved these lines!

'Love is never promised,
but it's worth all the risk'
`You're so right Joe ;)

Last stanza.. powerful and perfect. Beautiful write, reminds me of some of your previous writes!

:) well done.

"Nothing's everlasting
for the roads are long and winding
littered with debris of broken hearts;
but it's worth all the struggle
for everything's photographed."

First line: I like how you just start off with a plain statement...

Second line: I have to agree with Temps on this one, I didn't really like how it was just "for the roads", because I didn't know what roads, the roads of life or love?

Third line: This was a very unique line, I liked the imagery created and you gave much description for the reader.

Fourth line: This line is so true, great job so far.

Fifth line: This was something I never have heard before, I'm not quite sure I understand what it means though.

"Nothing's everlasting
for hearts do indeed collapse
under the pressure of affection;
but with tender intentions
the heart does reverse."

I loved the repetition of "Nothing's everlasting", that added a nice touch.

Second line: The wording here was great, you really get your message across to the reader.

Third line: Wow, this is original, I never would have thought about it that way.

Fourth and fifth line: Well-expressed, you really struck the reader and I was completely captivated. Your words speak such truth..

"Nothing's everlasting,
although we always can dream
and embrace the warmth that lies within,
for a calloused heart
becomes un-smothered."

Second and third line: Wonderful emotions and imagery given off, this is so fresh to read.

Fourth and fifth line: I really thought this was unique, I don't hear "calloused" often and you described everything so well here.

"Nothing's lasting,
for it all must come to an end,
but when in the arms of a loved
the surrounding world becomes unfocused,
stopping in time."

First line: Did you mean to change "everlasting" to "lasting"? It surprised me, that's all.

Second line: Yep, that's so right.

Third line: Maybe add "one" after "loved", it just sounds and reads better to me.

Fourth and fifth line: Wow, this is beautifully said, these lines were a joy to read.

"The roads might be a little hazy
but for a moment, they'll be cleared
and perhaps you'll find your way
through the beauty of the expedition
that's raveling within your heart."

First and second line: These lines hinted towards hope in the next couple of lines, and you kept the reader wanting more. By the way, nice flow, this read so smoothly.

Third, fourth and fifth: Your vocabulary here was very deep and powerful. I loved how you said, "perhaps you'll find your way through the beauty of the expedition...", well-expressed thoughts and feelings here. This simply stunned me. You have a way with capturing the reader and bringing the piece alive to them, so they feel what is going on, not just reading it.

"Love is never promised,
but it's worth all the risk
for the reward is a pair of wings
with hope of flight
without all the littered debris."

First and second line: These two lines hold truth and inspiration, showing that love is worth any risk, all of them.

Third and forth and fifth: This shocked me, I completely was not expecting this at all! I love the creativity just oozing out of each word. A pair of wings, with hope of flight, without all the littered debris. That's just so promising and hopeful. It gives the reader much inspiration. Nice work..

"Life is a quest full of roads,
long, short, up, and down,
but it is only you
who makes the decision
which way to go."

All lines: This is a life message, it speaks the truth and how only you can make the decision. Well-said.

"The roads may be long and winding,
but that won't stop me
from taking a journey to your heart."

I loved the repetition of the first line, and I felt the ending to be very strong. You are so sure and nothing will stop you, I love that attitude that is portrayed here. That last line was so strong and powerful, well done.

5/5 from me, just some minor things but otherwise this was a masterpiece.

Take care and have a good night..

~MaryAnne

Love is never promised,
but it's worth all the risk
for the reward is a pair of wings
with hope of flight
without all the littered debris.

this stanza spoke the loudest. its very truee

Life is a quest full of roads,
long, short, up, and down,
but it is only you
who makes the decision
which way to go.

i also loved this stanza cause its like you would do anything for this person.

i usually hate love poems but this one is really good. good job

Wow this is a brilliant poem the emotion that i could feel as i read this was amazing i liked the words you used very desciptive the imagry that was created was so clear and powerful the structure is very well laid out within the poem it helped the flow and made it easy to read

well done 5/5

It's hard to write something about love, or heartache and make it original but I think you've done that. the touch of optimism is great . One gets tired of the "poor me " poems
Things happen and we move on a little sadder but hopefully wiser
Excellent job.

Life is a quest full of roads,
long, short, up, and down,
but it is only you
who makes the decision
which way to go.

Of all the wonderful verse in this poem this one struck me the most because for us all it is so true. Health, loved ones, life itself, fate and our hearts may very well try to govern what we do with our lives but the paths we take no matter what are the ones we take as in the end it is our decision which way we go and we can always stop and change direction if we want to take the right paths. Unfortunately it take strength and will power to get off the wrong path but you can if you are strong.

Poem like this is why I love this site so much they breath a breath of fresh air with their originality even though the subject is as old as life itself LOVE. I am very familiar with yhis authors work and have admire his poetry nearly from the beginning of joining this site as I have many of this sites authors and as of yet he has never written a poem that has been in my no, no categories of contrived, flowery, false or worst of all flat poetry. His poems always manage to stir me.

I found the make up of this poem well produces as always it has pace, flow and meter, it stirs deep emotions and makes me thoughtful, a WoW poem of excellence, I have added it to my favourites and will continue to look forwardd to reading all this poets new output. 5/5 Ray S

An outstanding poem... that had me captured from the start. An amazing read throughout, with the last stanza sweeping the reader of their feet! lol. I loved it.
Exremely well done,
Olwin.

This is a good poem
i liked reading it alot

"Life is a quest full of roads,
long, short, up, and down,
but it is only you
who makes the decision
which way to go."

that stanza i found was the most important of the whole poem
it sums up life very well
although i believe sometimes there are
certain circumstances where you must take a certain path that you do not want to
but good poem it was a very good read

This was absolutely beautiful. I have never read anything like it. I particularly liked the last stanza:

The roads may be long and winding,
but that won't stop me
from taking a journey to your heart.

Very nicely done on this.