Evil Within

Nic ur amazing!

I Loved it and it shows everone what they know that their keeping in side is in other people too!

Love your choice of words!

This is too good for words(: Amazing, The best lines for me were
"I am the evil you failed to be" && "With a tongue so tainted it's covered with lies"
Again amazing.!.

I am the evil you failed to be.
*I like how you said 'failed". Most people don't strive to be evil. Nice start hun.*

I am the filth you wash away.
But this dirt will return another day.
*I liked this part. Very vivid. one thing I would change is the second line. I would say, "But this dirt will return every single day" That seems more haunting, like no matter what this person will always be dirty.*

With a tongue so tainted, it's covered in lies.
*Wow..love this lne. Flawless ^.^ *

I am the stranger in your very own skin.
And I'll tell you a secret... I always win.
*Creppy ending Nic. I liked this. It wasnt your best but still a good write. I think you are playing it safe. I would like to see you write a love poem or do a free verse poem. You have an amazing talent, don't confine it by sticking to one thing. I used to do that, now I'm branching out and my poems are getting better. Keep it up hun. Much love. Nik*