Couldn't you Believe!

I really fascinated in your poem here..so very sweet and romantic...I have nothing to say but an excellent piece..
You deserve to rate
5/5",

Dear Moucha,

there were some minor flaws in this. I will copy the poem here and make the changes, so you can put both versions in a file ans see what I mean ok?

You don't want to hear, the names of the places we could go?
Don't you really fear, your feelings and expression you want to show?

I am afraid of the tears you shed on your face
Make me wish I was never born in this place

And there goes my ring, it must have been shattered
It was meant to sing, about the heart-things that mattered

About the things that made us feel so alive for so long,
about the things that you felt when I was so wrong

And someday, when the day is over, I promise to be gone
And someday there might be someone to sing for you this song

I was crying all this night, shedding my tears thinking of you
So just be back tonight, and I will make you a queen too

Couldn't you believe, that everything I said was right
And it was not just a time killing, so I'd pass my night

A very emotional and strong plea, Moucha....
I don't want to say much more in this box, just God be with you and may He make things right for you, hun.

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid