Brava! Very well written. Can I assume you watch "True Blood", as do I? :-)

This was brilliant! I loved the story, it kept my attention thoroughly, and the rhyme was flawless. I could really feel the emotions of the person going through this. 5/5, great job!

Though poems of this nature are not my cup of tea when one the rare occassion I come acros a dark poem that is well written I still feel that I should comment on just that a well meter and strong flowing poem shame it was a vampire that crawled from below instead of the devil wanting to claim his soul. 5/5 Ray S

Though poems of this nature are not my cup of tea when one the rare occassion I come acros a dark poem that is well written I still feel that I should comment on just that a well meter and strong flowing poem shame it was a vampire that crawled from below instead of the devil wanting to claim his soul. 5/5 Ray S

Amazing. The way you structured this fantastic peice of poetry, it left me waiting to see what happened next.

Very very good!

[[loved]] itt...

Wow.....what a great story, so full of suspense!
I was really scared of what I read.....in just one poem, you managed to take me on a journey to hell and back.

I love this, absolutely flawless and so well written!

Hats off for you girl!

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid

Not too many people can write such a great story on this site with excellent flow and keep the readers attention throughout.. yet you can! This was amazing, so suspenseful and had me on the edge of my seat. Each line so smooth and rolled off my tongue. Well done, this was impressive and something different! :]

Very well done. Held my interest to the very last word.

A good piece, I feel. Though I didn't have a particular favourite stanza, I did have a favourite rhyme;

"You're a monster" I breathed, "The devil!" I cried
"A vampire" he snarled and spoke with great pride

I liked the story. It kept the piece driven. The use of speech was good, too. If done well, it can be a powerful tool, I believe. You're wording was also desirable. A pleasant read.

Brad