Ancient Tree.

"Ancient tree breathes life
into me as I climb up
old cobblestone steps."

First line- Loved how you talk about an ancient tree breathing life, that just hit me and put me into this fantasy world.

Second and third line- Great use of your imagination! I never would have thought to use "cobblestone" to described steps, I would have probably put something more cliche.

"This tree; my friend. How
lovely when invited in
to warm affection."

This was so pleasant, it surprises me how much we people today just pass by nature and don't take time to appreciate the smells, feelings, and happiness it gives off.

"Offered kind shelter
among this fairytale wood
where fiction mingles."

Such magical lines you have constructed, it puts me at ease when reading this.

"A playground so sweet,
imagination runs wild,
as my body's freed."

This seems so unreal so dreamlike, but I love how you said your body is freed, that feeling must feel phenomenal.

"This tree; guardian,
watching over everything,
especially me."

These lines did not have a lot of wording in them, and this whole stanza put one word into my thoughts: innocence.

"As I prance around,
fingers caressing magic,
my tree, awaiting."

Yes, you used "magic" in here! I loved these lines, I truly have no suggestions, it is all so stunning.

"These trees, our saviors,
with a life only to give;
oxygen I breathe."

These lines made me think more, trees really do save us, I mean if you think about it, they are our friends! As crazy as people might think that sounds!

"A life of beauty,
given by our forestry;
Ancient tree breathes life."

Loved the repeat of that first line in the last line, it served well.

Also, I enjoyed reading "forestry", I really haven't heard that used before, so well done!

Congrats on the win and keep writing such magical and capturing works of art!

God bless you!

~MaryAnne

Offered kind shelter
among this fairytale wood
where fiction mingles.

*I love this part :) It's so creative and reminds me of little children playing outside. *

A playground so fine,
imagination runs wild,
as my body's freed.

*I don't really like how you used the word "fine" here. I'd maybe change it to "sweet" or "great" something like that. When I think of a playground the word "fine" doesn't come to mind. *

As I prance around,
fingers caressing magic,
my tree, awaiting.

*Again I get that childlike feeling here :) I love that you said "prance" instead of "run" or something simple like that. Very cute imagery here.*

A life of beauty,
given by our forestry;
Ancient tree breathes life.

*Instead of saying "breathes" I would say "brings" that seems to flow better. But other than that I loved this piece. I feel like you did a nice job with your story and you told it in a very new way. I love that you used a chain of haikus. I could never do that, one is hard enough for me. This poem shows how talented you are and how well you are at trying new things. A joy to read hun. :) Nik*

A very beautifuly written poem. I loved the words you used. It gave the poem a very real and magical effect! 5/5

mandy :)

p.s. Thanks for commenting on my poem. I really appreciate it!