Comments : Impulsive Longing

  • 14 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Very well done, this was simply stunning. I really am not good with only writing a few words on each line, but you have done an astonishing job. I am sorry if I have no critism or suggestions, the vocabulary was intense and created passion and "lightning fingertips" was something new. Keep up the growing and good work of your poetic journey, you will get far.

    God bless you!

    ~MaryAbbe

  • 14 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Wow, I spelled my name wrong, I am so out of it...

    I forgot to add that your verses capture more than just the reader's attention but their hearts, I am betting many will fall in love with this piece.

    :)

    ~MaryAnne

  • 14 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    The start of a fiery passion unfolding. You
    take the reader through each stage of love..
    very nice!

  • 14 years ago

    by Daisy if you do

    Wonderful write dear. There is so much passion in the verse and it was displayed in a great tone. Excellent job. 5/5

    Take Care,
    Kay

  • 14 years ago

    by Hollymariee

    I like how you created a rhythm , even though it doesn't rhyme . The lines flow really nicely together, and your wording is lovely . There's nothing to critique , 5/5 .

  • 14 years ago

    by Cindy

    A wonderful piece of love's passion.
    Excellent!
    Take care

  • 14 years ago

    by Fran

    A wonderful paean to passion. Love the phrasing in this poem, 'primal pounding', 'raw primordial lust' just capture the essence of our ancient desires.